R&S friends, can you provide me with the last 2 lines for my poem?

A still life from artist Severn Rosen inspired me to write a poem based on what I observed in the painting. It appeared as if the rising sun was awakening certain fruits and flowers while those in shadow were still nestled in slumber.



I am transferring the poem and it's images into a pattern suitable for needlepoint or cross-stitch, but I cannot finish the artwork until the poem is completed.



Thus far, I have:



Sunlight streaming,

lilies yawning,

fruits and flowers

greet the day.



Bachelor's buttons,

nodding, bobbing

lift their heads

and gently sway.



Dewy roses,

from the shower,

fuzzy peaches,

eggs so white.



Trumpet flowers,

herald morning,

(I wish to replace these last two lines, originally written as;

Severn Rosen's

"Still Life.")



For some reason, I don't care to have these last two lines in my artwork. Any ideas? Your help is most appreciated, and I regret that I don't have a link to, or a photo of, the painting that inspired me.

R%26amp;S friends, can you provide me with the last 2 lines for my poem?
Trumpet flowers,

herald morning,

Lovely day

Dawn takes flight.
Reply:Ummm, I don't have the last 2 lines, but can I make an honest suggestion? The word "eggs" totally skews the perceptual sense you are going for here. It's like a ballet dancer tripping over a homeless person. It's jarring. Perhaps another element of the painting?



"Nests holding life"?

"Nests hold life"?

"Nests of life?" Dunno LOL
Reply:Trumpet flowers,

Herald morning

kissed of dew

in new days light.





edit: thank you pangel (((())))))







how anout



Trumpet flowers

herald morning

all rejoice

at new days light



natures silent song

awakens bright.





stillness sings

fairwell to night.
Reply:...

a song of life

in morning light



edit:

maybe that should be 'and new day's light'
Reply:Your poem is lovely but I'm bad at poetry, I can't help you much....I just wanted to say

I missed you mommy

(((Mommy)))
Reply:morning dew

does catch the light



edit

me and mommy on same wavelength ... I much prefer hers though

very nice



edit

hate to do this

I agree with footie... which would alter the rhyming ... and also dew has already been used

eekk



edit again

ok if there are eggs there ... that would work



it is very lovely

((((RedQueen))))
Reply:Hello wife . I have no talent in that area sorry .



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Reply:Hey, I like the image of the eggs.





Trumpet flowers,

herald morning,

The joyful song

..... .. delight
Reply:Crackling bacon,

Coffee, just right.
Reply:Trumpet Flowers,

Herald Morning

Bees answer

Called to flight
Reply:Beauty joyous

Sweet and bright?

Not sure it fits correctly though but it shares the same rhyme scheme and meter.

Wish you all the best

(((RedQueen)))
Reply:The rainbow colors in the sky make everything so right.
Reply:night to day

and day to night.
Reply:Love of God

Goes on and on