Can someone help me with my poems? (review them)?

I wrote a few poems and i dont know if they are any good. My friends and family tell me i should try and enter a few contests, but i want to hear what all of you have to say about them. If you have any suggestions to make them any better, please tell me. i would really like to know.



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Horseback Riding



Rhythmic bumps

Up and down

The fear of falling off is eminant

The love of staying on is magic

One after the other

Hitting the solid ground beneath



Bay, like the color of the mud

Soft fur all over

Ears perked ready for the run

Gleaming leather saddle

Soft leather reins

Legs wrapped tight

Ready? Set. Trot!



Heavy dust in the air

Whinnys in the distance

Wind whisping through the barn

Old hinged doors

Cats meowing gently

And mice scattered about

Laden with wood paneled floors

Something more is coming



Holding on tight

Right, left, ...

Falling throught the air

padded by the sand

Eye-level with four cantering shoes

Get back up and try again

Spooked no more



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Can't write a Poem



Paper and pencil

But no words to come

Clock is slowly ticking

Time is running out

People around me

Their pencils madly racing

Only gives me one more thought

I can't right a poem



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Fall/ Thanksgiving



Leaves from green to orange and red

Barren trees sweep softly in the wind

No one around

Everything quiet and still

From warm to cold

And flowers to snow



People inside

Laughing and talking

Sitting in chairs

Already eating

Football is on in the old living room

Cries of delight in the loud dining room



Turkey and gravy

Cranberries and cassaroles

Plates a mess with mountains of food

Silverwear strewn all over the table

Stains of red wine and other surprises

Wait a year, then do it again



Leaves from green to orange and red

Barren trees sweep softly in the wind

No one around

Everything quiet and still

From warm to cold

And flowers to snow



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Swimming (I need the most help with this one)



Cutting through the water

Like a knife and butter

Water droplets spraying about

Caps and heads bobbing up and down

Legs kicking, and arms pulling

Gasping for more air



The finish line ahead

The diving block gleaming

One more stroke... then two... then three



The crowd is cheering

Laughing and talking

And the coaches are yelling

Screaming and clapping



It has all payed off

Those 6 o'clock practices

First place is mine

In free, back, breast, and fly



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Thanks to everyone that took the time to read these. I really appreciate it. I think they also need some new titles, so once again... if anyone has any ideas to make them better, let me know.



thanks =)

Can someone help me with my poems? (review them)?
You defiantly have talent.

I love what you're writing about, it's original.

You could help some of you lines flow a little better into one another.

example..

Clock is slowly ticking

Time is running out



Clock is slowly ticking

and time is running out.



Just a thought.

Anyway, Nice work:)
Reply:Just did some spell checking hon, their all very good, I rhyme mostly so I'm afraid I'd be no good of an edit unless rhyme was involved LOL sorry kiddo %26lt;3
Reply:they're really good, i like how its not nesesarily every other line rhymes, yet they go together perfectly, not everyone can do that.............................really great, keep up the good work.